FAMILY & FRIENDS
- still too haunting
- doesn't connect to the tones of the other two
- more positive
- the ending message does not fit the plot
- no dying of family
- make Mon loose his family's attention instead
- use color desaturation for Mon at first and once he tries to talk to them now they are desaturated
Idea for message- "You get what you give"
NATURE
- last message needs revision to fit the plot better
- creepy
- set up and pay off plot
Ideas for plot
- have piles of trash in his apt instead
- why just one bottle? maybe he needs to keep dumping
Idea for message- ".. your own trash... blah.." something along those lines
Overall with the message/slogan
-give more rhyme
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